In my first wiki I didn’t add any detail. I also didn’t add any vocab. I also made it way to short because it was only five lines long. I didn’t use show don’t tell like I didn’t describe the teacher in any way. I also didn’t describe Phillips excitement for track. I had a horrible second paragraph.

In the last wiki I had a lot of detail. It also had quotes from the book and a good use of vocab. This wiki was seventeen lines long. This one also had tons of detail and good description of people, places, and emotions. Also in the second paragraph I had good reasons to think it.